The Storm King by warden1207

I didn't really like it overall. There will be some spoilers in my review. It's meant as constructive criticism. If this weren't the writers first, I would've rated lower. When he gets the patreon after the first arc it gets a little better, but never markedly improves. Worth the read if you have nothing else to read, but it's not even really decent yet. Just being honest. That said, here's what I think...

There's not actually any sexual content. Not like some harem or erotic books for instance. It's really rare, implied or talked about, but not very descriptive. So that at least wouldn't turn you off the series.

The first thirty or so chapters are pointless filler and more a prologue than a story following a protagonist as he traverses his world seeking to fulfill his ambitions. The perspective changes are many, jarring, annoying, and confusing. Often giving you the same events happening by inconsequential characters and then the mc more than once.

The protagonist is acerbic, standoffish, weak, dense, rude, not very creative with his powers, and just plain boring.

The pacing is all over the place. Mostly it's too slow, spending too much time on things that really needed a time skip, and often the story flow seems like someone else is narrating the facts of the situation that's happening to a stranger they didn't actually see themselves with no emotion. Like a journal entry from some soulless automaton. “Leon got some groceries and everyone was mad with killing intent." Not, “Tiberius is looking at me, better go over here instead!" I.e. He's a cold fish with little character development, and no charm. Three years pass and he's still just an asshole to everyone with the same basic abilities and powers relying on stronger people to keep him alive. He has no real friends, has built nothing, and the only redeeming quality is his relationship with Elise. Which he handles poorly overall. Not really taking her advise, learning from her example, or doing anything for her despite him supposedly feeling inadequate. He's got a whole tribe of stone giants that swore to back him that he doesn't use, and they sent one of their own to guard him and he never uses them either. He gets a eighth tier women interested in him and he treats her like dirt. Despite her saving him more than once. Then there's Valeria who he should've gotten close to if just for more information and to win her over. He's a shitheel to be blunt. Power should serve a purpose, but Leon doesn't really have one. Everything is distant or indistinct, but it's too little too late pacing and story wise.

Then there's the plotholes, plot armor, and convenient saves. Of which there are many. Making the story feel forced at times or extremely cliche and on the nose.

If this was going to be published it would need to be severely edited and rewritten. Cutting out perhaps even over a hundred chapters worth. There's just not much going on after you cut out the filler content, like the entire academy arc, and all the pointless perspective changes. Many of the chapters could be condensed down into one and lose little. The author is chronically bad at showing and not telling. In that he doesn't do that, he tells you everything three times.